Need Book Writing Advice
NEED BOOK WRITING ADVICE
This is an example of what my dilemma is, the fictional characters are Michael, his grandmother Mary and his great-grandmother. These are the two options I’m up against and I’m just not sure which would be best to use.
When the phone rang late at night, Mary never expected what she was about to hear from her grandson. “Gramma, I just saw your mom”, Michael said in an excited voice. It took Mary a few seconds to fully grasp what was just told to her since her mom had passed away when Michael was only about a year old.
When the phone rang late at night, I never expected what I was about to hear from my grandson. “Gramma, I just saw your mom”, Michael said in an excited voice. It took me a few seconds to fully grasp what was just told to me since my mom had passed away when Michael was only about a year old.
While this is a fictional story with fictional characters, parts of it comes from a real life experience when my grandson was 16 years old.
While this won’t win any Pulitzer prize, I’m excited to try my hand into writing this short story. Thank you to anyone can offer advice on the writing style and photos!
I always prefer the active voice (the 2nd). Passiivity is my enemy.
That was my first choice too Roy. It seems like it would be easy to read. Thanks for your advice!
I have never written a book but many of my friends have. I am sharing this in hope one of them can help you.
Thanks Sandy for trying to get me advice. I’m thinking I like the 2nd option but not sure if that would be the most acceptable. Thanks for stopping by.
I don’t write short stories, but as a reader I like option 2. I love the hand drawn tree 🙂 !
I’m not sure how this writing will turn out, but I’m going to give it a shot. Thanks for your help in deciding on the option, I too prefer the 2nd one. I think the hand drawn tree will bring in some personality in the story. Wish me luck, hope to get it started soon. Thanks for stopping by Savvy Age.
the 2nd option! makes it more personal, more easy to tell and read..and love the sketch
Thanks for your vote LadyInRead! That was my thought also, plus it’s easier to write in that form. I have held on to the sketch my granddaughter drew all these years, I knew it would come in handy one day! Thanks for stopping by.
Fabulous writer always so much information
I enjoy writing Rich. Thanks for visiting, hope to have my story written soon.
I’ve always preferred third person but it looks like I’m alone on that lmao. as for the tree, mine is obviously my favorite bc 11yr old me draws better than 21yr old me 😂😂
I’ll try it both ways Alexandra, since you will probably be the one to proof read it. I just think third person gets confusing when I’m writing it. We shall see. Thanks for your input!